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Arc Highram wrote:Skill Name: Ancestral Sentinel Style
Skill Type: Sword Style
Skill Information: The Ancestral Sentinel Style is a sword style designed for those capable or taking heavy punishment. It focuses on getting close and going for quick kills even if it means taking a few hits. It also has several techniques to strengthen the body of the user to increase their ability to take punishment and give more punishment. It is also meant to allow the user to make themselves a human shield for their allies. Because this style of fighting is passed down through the Highram family for generations most of the techniques are named after masters of the style and Arc's ancestors who created them. - You have a sword style sir,,not a iron man style.
Skill Strengths:
-Strength of Steel: Users trained in the Ancestral Sentinel Style are trained to have bodies as strong as steel to withstand great punishment. - How is this a sword style?
-Brutal Swordsmen Ship: The attacks of the Ancestral Sentinel Style can wreak serious havoc on a purpose in very few attacks.
-Guardian Angel: The 'Sentinel' part comes into play in this style as it has techniques to turn the user into a human shield for their allies. - Human shield? what does that have to do with you being sword style. That is completely different style of fighting.
Skill Weaknesses:
-Recklessness: Users of this style tend to get hurt badly as it is very reckless and users are known to be careless. - this is not a weakness of a skill. more like weakness of your character.
-Imperfect Technique: Unlike his ancestors Ark neglected his swordsmen ship training in favor of training his physical strength more so his swordsmen ship is lacking. - this is not a weakness of a skill. more like weakness of your character.
-Pain Null: The style nulls the pain of the user, while this may seem like a perk at first in reality it just makes it harder for them to realize when they are pushing their limits and can cause them to get mortally wounded without being aware of how severe the wound is. - Ok,,, I don't know how this is sword style...really.
-I shall not kill: While he has the power Ark was trained never to kill and sometimes this can screw up his attack as he struggles to not use lethal force but still use appropriate force. - - this is not a weakness of a skill. more like weakness of your character.

Ability Lvl 1 Name: Balthazar Barrage
Ability Lvl 1 Type: Offensive, Sword Attack
Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user starts by striking the enemy's guard(or their face if they don't have guard up) with the pommel of the sword with great force to stun them, spinning around the target to get behind them and slash at their back feverishly 4 times.
Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
-Block this!: A stun/diversion strike followed by a well maneuvered spin and a combo attack from behind, this can be bad news for anyone who focuses on a frontward guard. - stunning is not allowed at lvl 1.
-4x Strike: Arc can get a solid 4 hits in with this move to deal some real damage.
-Good position: This attack also puts Arc in a good position for another attack.
Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
-Work on that spin boy: Ark's spin-movement leaves a bit to be desired so if the opponent isn't properly stunned by the first strike they can catch him in his spin. - not applicable since stunning is not allowed at lvl 1
-Size Matters: This 'stun' attempt at the start of the combo won't go over well with stronger opponents.- not applicable since stunning is not allowed at lvl 1
-Close Range: Arc has already be close for this attack to work.
-Quantity over Quality: Arc just kind of lashes out 4 times when he attacks with this combo, each individual strike isn't that powerful only when they are all put together do they rack up the real damage.

Ability Lvl 1 Name: Highram Sentinel
Ability Lvl 1 Type: Defensive Technique
Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 8 posts
Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user sheathes their blade and claps their hands together. The user uses their strong command of their body and mind to enter a super human state, hardening their body like steel. This gives them a 20 point endurance boost to the user and 10 strength points for 3 posts. - ok...I like the idea, however, this doesn't seem like a sword tech.
Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
-Never Stop Being Stronger: A solid strength boost that can be used in conjunction with an attack to deal some serious damage.
-Never Stop being Tougher: A large defensive boost that can make it much harder to damage Arc.
-Guardian Angel: When used in the defense of another the 20 point endurance boost becomes a 30 point one.
Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
Slow down there tiger: When in use the user is slowed dramticaly their speed reduced to 60% of their normal speed. - we don't use %. change it to like 30 points or something
Attack Speed Cut: While the blows become stronger they become slower, Arc's attacks moving at only 50% their normal speed. - this is same as your first weakness.
-Flesh is still flesh: While he becomes much tougher and stronger his skin is still skin it can be burnt or shocked and stuff like that. - this is sword tech not like a tekkai where you blocking attacks using your entire body. not applicable.
-Adrenaline friend or foe?: This move comes with an adrenaline rush, adrenaline rushes are things Arc tends to handle poorly and will cause him to act in a berserk and reckless fashion. - no. Again this is ability weakness not your character's weakness.

Ability Lvl 1 Name: Spiral Power
Ability Lvl 1 Type: Offensive
Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
Ability Lvl 1 Description: In a big f-u to logic and physics Arc holds his sword in both hands and holds it front of him and starts spinning on his heels. For about a second he will spin like this rapidly accelerating forming a spiral of wind around him that will cut anything it touches. The spiral at it's base is 5 meters in diameter and it curves in as you go up so it's just a needle like tip at it's top height of 7 meters tall. Getting caught in the spiral tornado will launch a person upward while cutting them severely unless they have some way to move through it. Arc can maintain this for upwards of 15 seconds(about 1 post)
Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
-Huston we have lift off: Getting hit by Arc's Spiral Power attack can send a person catapulting into the air. - how high?
-Like sticking your hand in a meat grinder: Touching the spiral can shred flesh and bone, getting caught in it can be disastrous.
-A shield of sorts: It becomes difficult to attack Arc in this state.
Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
-F-U physics!: Pseudo science is always trumped by actual science, when clashed against a skill that actually makes sense this attack can be over powered. - skill that makes sense? every skill makes sense. make new weakness.
-Pros don't get dizzy: Sadly Arc is not a pro and tends to get dizzy after using this - for how long?
-Logia: A logia user could just pass through the spiral and attack Arc while he is vulnerable - no. Logia user will be cut up, and will attack you even when you are not vulnerable since they won't get physically hurt unless you use haki.
-Momentum knows neither friend nor foe: While doing this Arc is incapable of seeing, hearing, or really interacting in anyway with anything out side the spiral. He could easily hurt someone he isn't trying too.

Ability Lvl 1 Name: Strauss Shield
Ability Lvl 1 Type: Defensive
Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
Ability Lvl 1 Description: Arc holds his sword in front of him with one hand and put's his other hand on the back of the blade and he tenses his muscles and coats himself and his sword in haki in preparation to block a blow. Lasts 2 posts or until cancelled.
Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
-Reinforced defense: When activated Ark's endurance is increased by 20 and attacks that hit his blade(unless they are exceptionally powerful - how much is exceptionally powerful?) are nullified. - nullified? negative.
-I need it now: Arc  can use this ability easily in the heat of the moment to stop an oncoming attack.
-Unmoveable: True to his "Black Wall" epithet when Arc uses this move he cannot be moved unless by a great force or by his own will. - what do you mean great force? opponents with +10 more strength than your endurance?
Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

- Because you are gaining +20 endurance, you need to balance it out by losing some stats.

-All or nothing: Even if terminated early Arc still has to wait the full cooldown before using this again
-Only so strong: While it's a good block, it's not perfect. Opponents of exceptional strength will be able to harm Arc regardless of the shield. - again how much is exceptional strength? +10 more strength than you?
-Hold on there tiger: Even though Arc can nullify the shield at will for the remainder of the post his speed is reduced by 50% if he does so. - take out the nullify. It's haki, it doesn't nullify attacks. It allows you to cause greater defense or attack logia users, but not nullify.
-Now would be a really bad time for an earthquake: The environment around Arc isn't invulnerable and attacks capable of damaging the ground or his environment could be used to trap or potentially harm Arc.

Ability Lvl 1 Name: Mountains Will Fall
Ability Lvl 1 Type: Offensive, Haki, Sword Attack
Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 1 use per thread
Ability Lvl 1 Description: Arc grips his sword with both hands and pulls back gathering all of his strength into one attack. He then lets loose in a powerful horizontal slash capable of cleaving through steel and stone alike. The force of the attack sends out a sharpened shock wave 6 feet long and a foot tall with a range of 20 meters. The shock wave is also very powerful, although not as much as the initial attack.
Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
-1, 2, 3 death!: This attack has decimating power that shreds through most materials. It can hurt a person insanely bad.
-Shockwave: The force of the attack actually carries past the initial swing creating a large shock wave that gives the attack some actual long range potential.
-This is my full power: This attack carries 20 more strength behind it then Arc's normal attacks.
Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
-This is my full power, all of it: This attack carries super natural strength, but it's all Arc is capable of. Once used he is left incredibly drained and he doesn't have any attack near as powerful so it's safe to say if you can survive this attack you win the fight. - not a weakness. you won't have any attacks near as powerful? that's not a ability weakness, thats your character's weakness.
-One Shot Wonder: This slash takes up too much of Arc's energy to be used more then once a thread.
-Logia has a chance: While the initial slash is haki coated so it can harm logia users, the shockwave can't carry the haki so the shockwave won't hurt logia users.
-After shock is never as impressive as the initial burst: The shockwave while it serves as a dangerous after effect of the attack it doesn't have the power to cut steel or stone, it maxes out at wood.
-Still only rookie power: While this attack can cause some serious trouble for people on the same level as Arc, higher grade pirates are likely to fare better. - of course. Take this weakness out.
-A lack of finese: Arc isn't the most elegant fighter so a particularly fast and graceful individual may be able to exploit Arc's slower, rougher movements to avoid the attack or even counter attack. - you can say, opponents with +10 more reflexes than skill user's speed can counter attack.
-Timing is Key: Arc has to be in combat for at least 4 posts before he can use this attack.

Arc Highram wrote:Skill Name: Ultimate Breaker Style
Skill Type: Champion Style
Skill Information: The Ultimate Breaker Style is a style of hand to hand martial arts for exceptionally physically strong individuals. Because of the high strength requirements of some moves champions are best suited to using this fighting style. The attacks are generally slow but carry a powerful impact with them, however that's more of a generalization then a rule. The primary attacks are a mixture of crushing palm thrusts and and destructive punches. The idea for the fighting style was first conceived by a martial artist from long ago who witnessed the power of the Tremor Tremor No Mi and wanted to attempt to mimic it's powers, the result wasn't an exact replica and the destructive power of the Tremor Tremor No Mi could never be matched but several aspects are similar. Users are commonly refered to as "breakers".
Skill Strengths:
-Be a Man: Anyone with 10 less endurance then Arc has strength will has a great deal of difficulty blocking and taking his attacks. - change it to, Arc gains +10 Strength when physically hitting his opponent. It's hard to determine if someone is having hard time blocking someone's attack. By gaining +10 Strength added when you physically hitting them, ensures that your attack is more powerful.
-Bend and Break: Stone, wood, iron and thin steel have nothing on Arc and he will have little trouble smashing through them. - reword this to, Arc can break and smash through common stone, wood, iron, and thin steel.
-Fists of Haki: As a fighting style designed for the Champion class he constantly wields Armament Haki allowing him to hit logia users.
Skill Weaknesses:
-Close Range: Arc's attacks are limited to close range attacks only.
-Imperfect Technique: Finesse and precision were never among the strong suits of this style and individuals of greater finesse and reflexes may be able to use this to take Arc down. - reword this to, Arc lose -10 Finesse when using this skill.
-Pain Null: The style nulls the pain of the user, while this may seem like a perk at first in reality it just makes it harder for them to realize when they are pushing their limits and can cause them to get mortally wounded without being aware of how severe the wound is. - put the "the style nulls the pain of the user" under strength.
And reword the weakness to, It only nulls the pain of the user for 3 posts. After 3 posts, user can't use that limb due to using the damage limb continuously. or something alike. If not change it to something else. You need to specify what will happen to those limbs after you nulls the pain. What if I broke your leg, and you keep using your leg, eventually your leg will die out and can't use it no more.
-You can run but you can't hide!(not that you need to, running will work just fine): Breakers are notoriously slow not just in their attacks but in their movement speed as well. - reword this to Arc lose -10 Speed when using this skill.


Ability Lvl 1 Name: Breaker Palm
Ability Lvl 1 Type: Offensive, Palm Strike
Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
Ability Lvl 1 Description: Arc plants his feet and pulls back one arm and thrusts it forward at a target in an open palm strike. The force behind the attack is capable of shattering stone.
Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
-Blocking isn't your best plan: Unless his target has endurance 10 points higher then (than) Arc's strength blocks from them won't be effective. - I suggest you make new strength. By this mean, if I have 10 more endurance than your strength, this ability is useless against me. How much damage one take depends on their endurance and the attacker's strength, just because they have 10 less endurance won't make their block effective against your attack.
-Bones or Stones: The Breaker Palm has the potential to break bones and if it hits critical location it can crush organs.
-Ready Steady Go: The Breaker Palm has a short cooldown so it can be used several times in one fight. - not an applicable strength. make new one.
Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

you need at least 3 weakness. Second, make sure to balance out your weakness and your strength.

-Close Range: Arc has already be close for this attack to work.


Ability Lvl 1 Name: Haki Sentinel
Ability Lvl 1 Type: Defensive Technique - change it to support.
Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 8 posts
Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user claps their hands together and activates full body armament haki using exceptionally greater effort and focus into the haki to improve it's quality and strength above the normal stat boosts of Champion Haki. This gives them a 20 point endurance boost to the user and 10 strength points on top of their Champion Haki boosts for 2 posts.

Just let you know you gain + 30 Strength & Finesse when armament activated.,, plus 20 endurance and 10 strength,,that's 90 stat boost right there. that's pretty op at lvl 1 tech don't you think. Unless you can balance out the weakness of this ability, I suggest you change it to something else.

Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
-Never Stop Being Stronger: A solid strength boost that can be used in conjunction with an attack to deal some serious damage. - reword this to, user gains +10 strength for the duration of the ability.
-Never Stop being Tougher: A large defensive boost that can make it much harder to damage Arc. - reword this to, Arc gains +20 Endurance for the duration of the ability.
-Finish him!: For a short time this ability gives Arc excessive power which he can use to land a mortal/finishing blow.
Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

Slow down there tiger: When in use the user is slowed dramticaly their speed reduced by 10 speed points - add "for the duration of the ability."
Attack Speed Cut: While the blows become stronger they become slower, Arc's reaction stat is reduced by 5 - change it to "Arc's lose -5 Reflexes for the duration of the ability."
-Make it Count: Haki Sentinel lasts only for a short while(two posts) and has a large cool down. - not an applicable weakness.
-Focus Padawan: This ability takes far greater effort and energy then basic Armament Haki for Arc and for 3 posts after it's usage he will be left moving sluggishly and feeling weak. So the stat reductions of his first two weaknesses carry on for that time even after the attack is over.

Ability Lvl 1 Name: THROW!
Ability Lvl 1 Type: Support
Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 2 posts
Ability Lvl 1 Description: Arc picks up one of his allies with both hands and throws them at the enemy. Alternativly he can try and pick up an enemy and throw them away. - Make new ability. You are a close combat user, since you are a champion. Try making some ability that is relevant to that.
Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
-Huston we have lift off: Arc has an impressive throwing arm capable of sending a full grown man flying for 20 meters.
-Combo Move!: This 'technique' can help his ally get into good position for an attack, or to make them into an attack.
-Last Person Off: On a crew loaded with devil fruit users Arc will likely be able to make good use of this if the ship is going down.
Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
-Please secure any loose or valuable items: Anyone thrown by this is prone to loose any loose or hand held items, which may be important. As it would be bad for a swordsmen being thrown at the enemy to drop their sword.
-Logia: Try to throw a logia user with bare hands, I dare you.
-Momentum knows neither friend nor foe: What has been thrown cannot be unthrown.
-I think I pulled something...: For 1 post after usage Arc loses 5 reflex points.

Ability Lvl 1 Name: Strauss Shield
Ability Lvl 1 Type: Defensive
Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts - change it to 6 posts.
Ability Lvl 1 Description: Arc holds his arms in front of him in an X-Shape and he tenses his muscles and coats himself and his sword in haki in preparation to block a blow. Lasts 2 posts or until cancelled. - take out the sword.
Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
-Reinforced defense: When activated Ark's endurance is increased by 20 and attacks that hit his arms are muffled to lose 10 strength points. - take out lose 10 strength. How can I lose -10 strength by just hitting you? look, I punch you with all my might, my strength is still the same, you might not feel it's full power because you have higher defense.
-I need it now: Arc can use this ability easily in the heat of the moment to stop an oncoming attack. Just let you know, noticing on coming attack is based on your reflexes and defending it fast enough to block it is based on your speed. don't need to change.
-Unmoveable: True to his "Black Wall" epithet when Arc uses this move he cannot be moved unless by a great force(such as an enemy with strength 20 points (change it to 10) over his boosted endurance) or by his own will.
Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
-All or nothing: Even if terminated early Arc still has to wait the full cooldown before using this again
-Only so strong: While it's a good block, it's not perfect. Opponents of exceptional strength(such as an enemy with strength 20 points over his boosted endurance) will be able to harm Arc regardless of the shield. - take out exceptional strength, and change it to +10 strength instead of 20.
-Hold on there tiger: Even though Arc can lower his guard at will for the remainder of the post his speed is reduced by 50% if he does so.
-Now would be a really bad time for an earthquake: The environment around Arc isn't invulnerable and attacks capable of damaging the ground or his environment could be used to trap or potentially harm Arc. - how so? you can't move while this ability is active? you can simply move to dodge these attacks. make new weakness.

Ability Lvl 1 Name: Asura Palm
Ability Lvl 1 Type: Offensive, Spirit Projection
Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 1 use per thread
Ability Lvl 1 Description: Arc spreads his feet wide, closes his eyes and claps his hands together. In his mind he visualizes four extra arms on his body, in his mind they appear also clapped together so there are three sets of clapped together hands stacked on top of each other. Then by projecting his spirit he makes the arms semi-tangible so that they become more real allowing people to see them at this stage however they are just illusions. To further solidify them Arc coats the semi-tangible extra arms in Haki to give them a solid presence. Now they are solid and can be used to attack. Arc can either use this to execute one extremely powerful attack(one blow with all six hands dealing 6x the damage of his Breaker Palm) or use it as a "super form" of sorts and use the arms as a way to attack faster(gives him a 10 point reflex, finesse and speed boost on top of having 4 extra arms) and harder(+5 strength as well) -- this requires you to have higher intelligence. you have 0. Intelligence measures your ability to invent, be a strategist, provide medical help to others And store information with a much higher recall rate. It is also said that People with high intelligence can see the future and do things that others can not in terms of psychic phenomenon. make new ability.
Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
-1, 2, 3 death!: This attack has decimating power that shreds through most materials. It can hurt a person insanely bad. (Assuming he uses it for the single attack variation)
-Accelerate: Using the second variation of the attack Arc attacks much faster and can attack multiple times at once.
-Ultimate Power to Suit your Needs: Any way you look at it this is Arc's most powerful ability and conveniently it's multi-functional and can provided a powerful boost in two different ways to best suit the situation.
Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
-Are you ready yet?: This attack takes 30 seconds time to prepare and until then Arc is vulnerable to attack as he is required to be in a meditative stance and cannot pay attention to the material world. (I am aware normally time is measured in posts, but the prep for this attack is just concentration. I doubt anyone wants to read multiple full length posts of Arc "concentrating".)
-One Shot Wonder: This ability takes up too much of Arc's energy to be used more then once a thread.
-Still only rookie power: While this attack can cause some serious trouble for people on the same level as Arc, higher grade pirates are likely to fare better.
-Timing is Key: Arc has to be in combat for at least 4 posts before he can use this attack.
-That's all I got: Manifesting 4 arms out of nothing is no easy feat and causes Ark to suffer a stat loss mirrored to the stat gain he gets while using the Asura Palm for 3 posts afterwards.