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    Raiga Kenpachi's skill set

    Raiga Kenpachi
    Raiga Kenpachi


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    Character Profile
    Character Name: Raiga Kenpachi
    Primary Skill: Palm Strike Style
    Secondary Skill: N/A

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    Post by Raiga Kenpachi Tue Jan 28, 2014 3:41 pm


    Skill Name:Palm Strike
    Skill Type:Melee
    Skill Information:Raiga fights with heavy fist and likes to shoot many thrust at the stomach, Nose, Elbow, and knee. His thrust are mainly opened palmed thrust and he rely's on offence, speed, stamina, and strength. Raiga fight's with accuracy on these areas on his opponent body, yet with his short training he still has a while before he reaches up to anyone strong. The damage caused by each attack are serious damage, because these sensitive areas are easy to break.

    Skill Strengths:

    1#:Strikes the most Sensitive areas that are not usually touched making the strikes more painful.
    2#:Could render some areas like the knee useless for a min.
    3#:Instead of using the users fists, they use their Palms which helps the hands of the user not break as easily.

    Skill Weaknesses:
    1#: Attacks can be countered easily.
    2#:Can take time to accurately hit nerve's on the specific area's.
    3#:Hand can be strained if stayed positioned in a flat state too long.


    Level 1 Techniques:


    Last edited by Raiga Kenpachi on Sat Feb 01, 2014 11:50 am; edited 3 times in total
    Raiga Kenpachi
    Raiga Kenpachi


    Rank 1- Player-

    Lineage : Vanquisher's Valor

    Beli Beli : 34663
    Posts : 10
    Race : Human
    Gender : Male
    Crew : Absolute Zero
    Affiliation : Pirate


    Character Profile
    Character Name: Raiga Kenpachi
    Primary Skill: Palm Strike Style
    Secondary Skill: N/A

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    Post by Raiga Kenpachi Wed Jan 29, 2014 3:45 am

    I am done with this.
    Azure Snow
    Azure Snow


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    Character Profile
    Character Name: Azure D. Snow
    Primary Skill: Heaven Nōdachi Style
    Secondary Skill: Gun Blade Style

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    Post by Azure Snow Fri Jan 31, 2014 12:58 am

    Fix Corrections in Red.

    Raiga Kenpachi wrote:Skill Name:Palm Strike
    Skill Type:Melee
    Skill Information:Raiga fights with heavy fist and likes to shoot many thrust at the stomach, Nose, Elbow, and knee. His thrust are mainly opened palmed thrust and he rely's on offence, speed, stamina, and strength. Raiga fight's with accuracy on these areas on his opponent body, yet with his short training he still has a while before he reaches up to anyone strong. The damage caused by each attack are serious damage, because these sensitive areas are easy to break.

    Skill Strengths:
    1#:The part's he target are very sensitive and can be very painful. (Strikes the most Sensitive areas that are not usually touched making the strikes more painful.)
    2#: can leave them in pain which will make target either surrender or run away. (Change this to something else. you cant force a target to surrender or run away, they must do it on their own.)
    3#:Instead of using fist Raiga's hands will not break as easily. (Rephrase/something like this: Instead of using the users fists, they use their Palms which helps the hands or wrists of the user not break as easily.)

    Skill Weaknesses:
    1#: Attacks can be countered easily.
    2#: Palmed hand could be broken if knee or elbow are strong enough. (I would change this weakness. doesnt make much sense to me.)
    3#:Takes focus to it these area's. (focus on what areas? )


    Ability Lvl 1 Name:Nose Smash
    Ability Lvl 1 Type:Melee
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 1 post (No, must be at least 2 posts.)
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:1#: Nose Smash!: When Raiga is close- range to his enemy, he fakes a kick toward their side chest but then he smashes his palmed fist into the person's nose.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths: (Rephrase things, why is it Difficult to dodge? , depending on the user, they may not take to much damage, and so change the Blood lose thing, you can keep the "Could Possibly brake nose" But add, If it hits- like this:"Could Possibly brake nose If the attack hits" )
    -hard to dodge,
    -can cause a lot of blood lose,
    -and could possibly brake nose.

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses: (I dont like to see 3 and 4 worded weaknesses. i understand that this is a simple skill set but i would like more detail. I want o see something like this.: "Can be blocked if paying close attention to the tricky Technique." - Thats more of a weakness and adds flare to it. making it still simple but cool. so add more stuff like that. I want to see detail.)
    -Can be blocked,
    -could be countered,
    -takes lot's of energy.


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Back Breaker
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Melee
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown:2 post
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: Raiga run toward's his enemy and slides under there legs, then he leaps up and faces the back as he does multiple palm strikes into the back and with one last side kick to end it.

    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths: (More detail in the strengths. How long do they stay dizzy? breaking ribs on the back is more difficult, harm to the spine makes more sense. --- Add more Details and stuff.)
    -Possible to break ribs,
    -hard to predict,
    -and can cause dizziness.

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses: (By a lot of energy, how much is that? will it make you not be able to do anything for a post? or will it force you to make a few moments to breath? add more detail and be specific. By cannot be used multiple times what do you mean? can you only use this technique for one thread or something? its a level one technique that isnt as powerful as the rest of the techniques and should be used after the cool down, or else you may not have too many options within a task. Smile )
    -Takes a lot of energy,
    -can be dodged,
    -and cannot be used multiple times.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Knee Breaker
    Ability Lvl 1 Type:Melee
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown:2 post (Make this one 3 posts)
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:Raiga run's at full speed towards the enemy knee's and smashes them with his palmed strike then he knee's them in the chest.

    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths: (You dont really break the patella(Knee bone) the ligaments would be hurt and torn before that happens. So put something like: "The force of the Strike can cause the Ligaments of the Knee Area to be torn." By a minute, not very long. I would make this technique better, "Can make the target limp for their next post, (-10 Reflex for one post.)" something like that. but if you add stat bonuses you must balance them out with negative stats on your weaknesses. -shown below. )
    -could possibly break knee cap bones,
    -Could make them not walk for a minute,
    -and could cause enemy to surrender or crawl away.

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses: (I want more detail with these weaknesses. "Can be dodged by jumping out of the way" . "Can be blocked easily if the target is paying attention." and that last one isnt really a weakness i like to see. its pretty obvious that you will be using some energy so put something like this- "The Palm Strike makes the user open for an attack to the spine and back of the head, If the user is countered then they will get a -5 reflex for one post." -that will balance out the Strength and give your technique more character.)
    -Can be dodged,
    -can be blocked,
    -and take's some energy.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name:Elbow Pain
    Ability Lvl 1 Type:Melee
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown:2 (make this one 3 posts)
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:Raiga leaps to the enemy and tumbles underneath their legs and crouches by their backside while he strikes the two elbows with his palmed fist.

    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths: (add more detail. so, the numbness will only last for a little bit and wont be permanent so say "If hit in the elbows can cause numbness in the arms for a short amount of time." it cant really cause critical damage, all your doing is hitting the nerve, sending a shock wave into the arms. and i dont see how it could break bones, since the leverage is not there. )
    -Can cause numbness to enemy's arms,
    -could make their arm's have critical damage,
    -and could possibly break bones.

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses: (Add more Detail. I want new Weaknesses with this one.)
    -Can be dodged,
    -somewhat blocked slightly,
    -and takes some energy.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Painful Tricky
    Ability Lvl 1 Type:Melee
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown:3 post
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:Once Raiga gets close to the opponent, he would trick the person by throwing a fake punch so he could low kick the enemy and flip them so he can thrust both of his palmed hands into the person's lower torso.

    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths: (Add more Detail. lol. also, be specific on things. Hard to dodge how so? And with that last weakness, take it out. say it can knock the wind out of someone, causing a -5 in reflex for a post.)
    -Could cause confusion,
    -Hard to dodge,
    -and powerful enough to K.o a weakling.

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses: (Add new weaknessess, More detail and be specific.)
    -Can be blocked,
    -could be countered,
    -and possible to predict.


    I assume after you read all this that you will get an idea on what im looking for. All in all i was a lot more detail and creativity. be as specific as you can and do your best. Bump it when changes have been made. Ah.. and add some color to the application.
    Azure Snow
    Azure Snow


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    Race : Human
    Gender : Female
    Crew : Heaven's Winter
    Affiliation : Shichibukai


    Character Profile
    Character Name: Azure D. Snow
    Primary Skill: Heaven Nōdachi Style
    Secondary Skill: Gun Blade Style

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    Post by Azure Snow Sun Feb 02, 2014 6:59 am

    APPROVED

    Raiga Kenpachi wrote:
    Skill Name:Palm Strike
    Skill Type:Melee
    Skill Information:Raiga fights with heavy fist and likes to shoot many thrust at the stomach, Nose, Elbow, and knee. His thrust are mainly opened palmed thrust and he rely's on offence, speed, stamina, and strength. Raiga fight's with accuracy on these areas on his opponent body, yet with his short training he still has a while before he reaches up to anyone strong. The damage caused by each attack are serious damage, because these sensitive areas are easy to break.

    Skill Strengths:

    1#:Strikes the most Sensitive areas that are not usually touched making the strikes more painful.
    2#:Could render some areas like the knee useless for a min.
    3#:Instead of using the users fists, they use their Palms which helps the hands of the user not break as easily.

    Skill Weaknesses:
    1#: Attacks can be countered easily.
    2#:Can take time to accurately hit nerve's on the specific area's.
    3#:Hand can be strained if stayed positioned in a flat state too long.


    Level 1 Techniques:

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